To be Heard-a Poem by me. I would love feedback and a thought on if you think I could get published?

Not to be facetious or anything but I honestly think it sounds more like the description of a novel. Its a great poem but I just feel it sounds like it's already been done. Like the poem 'Rainy Day' by William Wadsworth Longfellow. Try reading it. It's a good poem. but, yours seems a bit complicated, unless that's how you wanted it. Don't take my criticism too harsh because it's honestly just my opinion. a href="http://www.alysion.org/poems2/RainyDay.html" rel="nofollow"http://www.alysion.org/poems2/RainyDay.h…/a